That's cool. I responded to the story as well. As about the joke with the spotted dick, I think I got it but I wasn't sure. The custard isn't supposed to be snapped is it? You have to pardon me, I'm just a Yankee. :)
Hey, like Zenryoku, i'm a roleplayer on the same forum, but we are uploading our bios to here as its a better set up. I was wondering if i could add my character to the hawk contract too please? He has the same summons as Zenryoku
Hmm, I'm not entirely sure, Steel would be Steel (鋼, Hagane), Song could be either Song (歌, Uta) or Song (曲, Kyoku). If I've got this right (Which I probably don't) It could be Steel Song (鋼曲, Haganegyoku).
Well there isn't too much to go on so far but, from what I can see she seems kind of... evil. But that's what I think of everyone that applies so much eye shadow / liner / whatever. :P
Honestly though, its off to a good start, should probably go into more on what makes her so feared though, and maybe flesh out on the abilities. Being able to fight with the God of Shinobi and Paedosnake begs explanation!
The trivia bit makes me curious though, how does the Bombei version of the Steel Release work? It has to be a tad flexible if its gonna be using stuff like Steel Release: Massacre for example.
the Steel Release of the Bombei Clan is very much so flexible it can be liquidated as well as solidifed, it can be manipulated and densified, etc the Bombei Clan being the eldest clan of Kumogakure have mastered it to such an extent a member of this clan surpasses any other Steel user especially in possibilities, the genetics of this kekkei genkei has even formed steel plating underneath all of the members flesh to such an extend of concentrated chakra over the generations that it even tears their skin to show the visible undercoating, making their physical strength also formidable of properly focused on, they even can easily combat Mangetism jutsu, it is very flexible and manuverable yet to vast in its abilities and is fiercly powerpul when handled by these masters who were born with it (when trained anyways, i mean the head or jonin level shinobi in this clan are like intensely skilled anyways) most notable Koen and Kouma
haha i suppose so, many of the clan (top tier members anyways) though utilise many other elements like lightning, water, fire, earth, wind, and yin etc and some are even born wwith 3 affinities for kekkei tota such as Kamera who can use metal and Aiko who can use Smoke, etc they are very skilled in their kekkei genkei but they believe that only focusing on their affinity and bloodline is what foolish people do (Koen even dishonors the whole Uchiha and Hyuga clans but commenting on their limitation and even the massacre of the clans) etc but ya generally steel golems :3 eh by the way seeing as im connecting characters with Hikaku Jiryōku (Prodigy), Gekietsu (Kirisharingan) and Arshiya (forget exact spelling) (Kazeyo) would you like to link your character with mine as well (meaning same timeline, same version of the Narutoverse, etc) you could have more possibilities for stories and stuff?
All my characters pretty much come from an alternate universe as it is, so it'd be an alternate universe of an alternate universe, if you don't mind that. Though maybe we should pull everyone together (Prodigy, Kazeyo etc.) and make an AU for Narutofanon as a whole or something.
haha ya genetics a cruel mistress :P and haha ik XD i thought it sounded cool "Bomb-bay" XD Kiri even offered to have my clans last name be "Falling Bombs" but in the japanese word which i think was Jyokyu XD i plan to change it though into a more steel themed name as well or w/e but idk what a good name would be yet
lol alright i was going to say Kamera and Aiko's pages arent even that long XD by the way check out what i added to Kouen adnd tell me some added thoughts to her character and how she is as a person, etc
Bah, I'm not used to looking over something that isn't complete, but I do gotta say, they all seem extremely overpowered, going toe-to-toe with the canon's BAMFs with little issue with little defining as to how or why. Its just somethin' to think about, the best characters are the ones with a balance after all.
Anywho, I'm gonna nod off for some sleep, feel free to nudge any of the other folks towards the blog!
and meh its balanced actually because all the other characters are around my qualification plus stats just refer to skill level rather then power ... Kouen is the only one i even openly state her power qualifications on
Well I'm not very good as a critic, unless its being, well, critical, so I kind of try to refrain from it, unless you're fine with me being harsh.
I don't remember seeing any stats on their pages, but that doesn't make them any less overpowered. I mean on Aiko's page, her eyes apparently rival the Sharingan. How? You need to explain how she can rival a Sharingan, what she did to acquire this ability. Might Guy only learned to do it because he's eccentric as all Hell and only came up with the idea after losing to Kakashi numerous times.
Also saw the Bombei clan page, and the translations that you wanted:
dont blame me XD blame Prodigy he is the one thta wrote her personality for me XD although i think he solely meant in analytical ability (which i even asked him about) rather then actual visual jutsu and all of the sharingan perks
I obviously wasn't expecting her to have the dojutsu or Sharingan perks, I'm talking specifically about her perception which since she doesn't have Sharingan or Byakugan, or another dojutsu, or is a Sensor, its just kind of... overdone.
And not I'm blaming anyone, just pointing out the OP :P
its totally not OP if she cant beat most of the other characters i have, orochimaru, or even prodigys etc XD and she cant see the chakra lol analytical as in using her superior intelligence and keen eye site to observe everything around her, etc and even see through many jutsu, she is a easy target for genjutsu generally though for example so minus genjutsu she can see through most techniques on how they work which is 100% due to intellect etc
Perception is what I'm talking about, not seeing chakra or other crazy abilities, just natural perception, which hers is ungodly. If she can see through jutsu easily, and has such great intelligence and perception, how is she affected by genjutsu? They're illusions by definition, by all rights she could catch them easier than she would see through a giant ball of fire.
her genjutsu is only a 3 thats how XD (it takes more for her to dispell it) and nah she knows the working of fire jutsu so on so forth by seeing through it she already knows it in and out before someone uses it, her perception of jutsu doesnt help her unless its tricks like teleportation, etc in which then she can quickly device strategies, and everything, actually predicting where one might go if she can follow them which she may not be able to at all,m or like poppet jutsu, or all of these specific jutsu she can see through quickly with observation of intellect to device how to approach it
so NOTHING like a sharingan and can definately not rival a sharingan unless its analytical ability (which purely depends on the user too, and shes a genius so she surpasses most in that field) which is handy when she cant see chakra or anything to see where a attack may be coming from etc
Most people were dispelling it with 1's. So, that doesn't really work.
Right, so she knows the fire jutsu in and out before its even used. Come on, that is textbook overpowered. For one, how would she know the jutsu, considering there are millions? If its a common jutsu, fine, sure, but that's doubtful and very likely to be a rarity considering everyone likes having their own unique techniques. Not to mention the Sharingan does this too by increasing the users perceptions to the point that they can pick up muscle tension.
ah well if its new jutsu, ya pretty much, so nothing again like a sharingan as a sharingan doesnt know how unique jutsu work unless they look at the chakra used and hand seals etc where as she can instantly split apart the components to form the jutsu, which is solid intellect, and once again not OP, sasuke and Naruto are op lol she cant beat them nor can she even fight the raikage or orochimaru lol so no OP is when you put yourself on these guys level which she isnt, she cant beat maito guy, hiruzen sarutobi, madara, tobi, jiraiya, kabuto, itachi, pain, so do explain how this is OP when 99% of characters on here are on their level or atleast seem that way with rinnegans mangekyos sage modes, etc? do explain lol shes more on maybe killer B or omoi/ karuis level then direct top tier lol and even that if kidller b goes into kyubi form shes screwed.... also her stats and powers are perfectly balanced with hikaku, gekietsu, and other characters in this world so once again in which way if she op? do explain? ive watched her carefully, never given her any random kekkei genkei or sage modes, or op jutsu that doesnt work with her even remotely, etc, and i even made to check with Kazeyo, Prodigy, etc to make sure she wasnt OP by regular Naruto standards and they all said the same thing not even remotely close, so do explain? and even if she understands the sciences doesnt mean she can dodge or even fight against it
That is not what OP is, sure its a part of it, but that's not what OP is. Being overpowered is when you can do some absurdly insane shit without any logical explanation. At the age of 23, Aiko's eyes should have already started deteriorating, its a natural thing, no one has that kind of perceptive ability to simply spot so bloody much without aid, which is an ability both Sharingan and Byakugan (And glasses) grant. Her intelligence also doesn't make sense, you seem to be using it as a be-all end-all. Which it isn't. No matter how intelligent someone is, unless they're a prophet, then they wouldn't be able to tell when something from anywhere would jump out and scare them shitless, nor would they be able to predict what someone is going to do in advance purely by observing them in a fight, it takes more than a couple of seconds to get a grasp of what someone is going to do. It requires that you know the person, have some understanding of how their mind works, or Sharingan, which tracks muscle movements so that they can mimic the other's ability and make it look like their predicting the future. Your saying Aiko can do this because she's smart and has good eyes. That doesn't work without a deeper explanation as to how.
Next, did I say anything about the other people on the site? I already know most of those folks are OP, it's why I avoid RPing with the majority much of the time, because what's the point if all your going up against is a walking God Mod? But they aren't the purpose of this discussion.
Annnd, being able to take on the big leagues is also not OP, but it is a part of it true, my own character Kaasage Tachinai is pretty much a god mod in his own right (He's a zombie, work that shit out) but I wouldn't say he could take on many of the canon characters and win because their all immensely broken and OP themselves but that doesn't make him any less OP.
I would but I'm off to go get some stuff done, also you forgot to vote on a name on zee talk page :P
a sharingan is 100% different then just sharpened eye site like Aiko has, a sharingan (cant really spot components as thats 100% user reliant), but it can seperate chakras, hand seals, motion (which she cant unless she gets a real good view of the speed of the technique and chakra concentration which again, she cant, unlike the sharingan, ergo the sharingans natural perception is better then hers still by miles, however she can do things that only a user itself has the ability to do such as break down components in a scientific manner), so once again dont blame me for stuff i didnt say, (which is why im defending the character), if you REALLY want to talk about power then dont mention her CLEARLY unequaled eyes tro a sharingan (as ive stated all through this yet you wont listen) but mention her water flicker technique XD thats the ONLY "op" thing she even has because she can keep up with teleporters, etc, she cant even percieve of the density or any of that of the attack unlike a sharingan, and she can easily predict movement if she follows the patter its proven in reality you can predict without knowing someone as long as you carefully watch them which ALOT of the time doesnt work with Aiko as its hard to do so in direct battle as she herself states, no no doesnt work that way, all of your points are miles off so far, and she cant see random people jumping out of no where although she tends to be usually fi not always alert so one branch and shes in attack formation, seeing through stuff doesnt mean she can predict unpredictability (such as jumping out), etc so yes all your poitns are wrong so far and can easily be argued against :3
Okay, I'll play it your way, you don't want to listen, this somehow means I'm not listening and that I'm "wrong". So here goes.
How sharp is her eye sight, you've never explained, can she still catch the motion of someone as fast as Itachi?
How can she tell how much chakra is being concentrated where? Chakra is invisible unless used in extremely high concentrations (Raikiri), which would require a dojutsu to see. Explain.
Okay tell me how you "break down the components" in a scientific manner of say a dragon made up of white flames, tell me how she can scientifically break down this technique, ergo, explain.
Again. You need to know what they could do, implications given thus far, is that Aiko would and should know what anyone is going to do from the get-go.
This is where I point out that you haven't paid attention to anything I've mentioned, despite you asking for it and then being impatient about it, what I wanted you to do is explain her perception. Lack of explanation leads to the appearance of it being a god mod. See where I'm coming from? Explain how good her perceptive quality is, explain what she can and can't do with it. So far all you've done is tell me how its not like Sharingan while making it like the Sharingan. Woops. Saying "Her eyes are on par with the Sharingan" isn't an explanation, saying "She had hawk-like perception and could easily pinpoint precise details in anything from a short distance" is an explanation.
You know being alert constantly puts you on edge? Guess what happens when something jumps out while your on edge? You jump. Branch snaps? You jump. Then do whatever you were going to do. Just "being alert" doesn't explain how she can be prepared for anything and everything to come out at her as being on edge at all times is emotionally taxing. As I've been saying all this time, explain how she's so ready at all times, was she specifically trained for it, does she have some hidden ability for it? Explanation is your friend.
The ability to argue can be done in anything. I could argue that chocolate is just frilly excrement, doesn't mean its a good argument.
Naruto has a Genjutsu skill of 1 (Later moved up to a 2) is capable of breaking genjutsu and can resist Itachi's ability to put people to sleep.
Rock Lee, can't use Ninjutsu or Genjutsu, but he has a Genjutsu stat of 1. Implication is that he can break Genjutsu.
Sakura had a 3 in Genjutsu and could break through A-rank techniques (Temple of Nirvana specifically).
Implication? Anywhere from a 1 to 2 makes you eligible to use Genjutsu Dissipation. Y'know, the ability to break Genjutsu. Aiko has a 3? Oh, that means anything A-rank and below can be broken or resisted. Whoops.
no it doesnt XD and i see and ill make it more explained then although ill seem retarded making so much detail on her eye site which isnt even anything randomly special that we havent seen characters (without sharingan) show before lol but alright
No, no he isn't. He's very consistent actually. He can break genjutsu of average quality, he can resist a genjutsu that knocks fuckers out, what he can't deal with is a genjutsu that plays on his emotional fears (Failing to bring back Sasuke, or breaking his promise to Sakura), because, as is made clear from the series itself, he's a bit of an idiot.
Itachi's genjutsu are all unranked, or based on the Sharingan (Being Kekkei Genkai related their also unranked), Itachi doesn't use anything that can be considered weak.
No what doesn't?
Every ability that is above the standard should be explained, its how you make a character feel grounded.
no 3 cant block A rank and lol its NOT ability its not natural eye site thats sharpened which is atleast 50% purely reliant on the user to detect, and i guess although if so why isnt Narutopedia explaining how come so many characters have amazing eye site? oh yea because it isnt really an ability lol unless you considered sharpened eye site and intellect an ability i guess but ya ill explain more :/
I told you I'd be harsh, but I did try to be nice and calm about this, only to have you throw everything I say back in my face with "lmao you so wrong". So this is the last of it. Do not respond to this, I will just ignore it even if you do. But here, lemme make it clear that when you toss something, that you asked for, back in someone's face while coming across as an asshole and calling them wrong when you've got it backwards creates vitriol.
Sharpened. How. Explanation.
Bullshit percentage pulled out of your ass, which isn't even relevent.
No one is shown having amazing eye sight in Naruto, those that do, have Byakugan or Sharingan. Which are explained on their specific pages as things they grant. The Inuzuka clan have a heightened sense of smell, amplified by concentrating chakra to their nose. Your senses are abilities, you don't need to actively do something to make it an ability.
As I pointed out already Sakura had a 3 in Genjutsu, she was very capable of breaking the Temple of Nirvana. An A-rank technique. So, you were saying?
There's an entire section on Itachi's Narutopedia page dedicated to his intelligence, mind repeating that "lol oh yea because it isnt really an ability lol" bullshit to me one more time?
Inuzuka Clan - Read that, it points out that the Inuzuka have heightened senses of smell.
Sharingan - Read that, it points out that the Sharingan increases the user's perceptive ability to the point of detecting muscle tension.
Itachi - Read that, it describes and explains his intellect, something Aiko is informed of having, but is never expanded beyond "Damn near prophetic because she got an A in Math".
Hello i was woundering if i would be allowed to sign your hawk summoning contract and use it with my character. I am a roleplayer in another roleplaying forum and am the owner of a hawk summoning contract on that site and was woundering if i could sign to create my hawks that are on that site and encourperate them within this site and using with my character.
I'll just have to delete that last one. I don't think I told you yet but my grandmother got cancer. It was around the time of my birthday. It's all settled now but I am so far behind that I don't have time to do another character.
I'm thinking colaberative. I don't do those that often. Also, I was wondering if you had any deceased villains that I could use as one of Taiga's victims. I want him to be known for killing someone extremely strong, like Sasuke after he killed Orochimaru.
Sure, okay. I don't need any help with the picture, because I am going to photoshop one face on another body, but I could use help with Jutsu. I'll make a list and then if you could help me add "Roka Hōzuki" to them, that would be great.
Have you seen Roka's picture. You may recognize it...Also, do you have any female Kirigakure kunoichi? I am trying to get Roka a girlfriend, but he has a violent personality and I don't think anyone outside of kirigakure would understand him.
For some really odd reason all my characters ended up being from Iwa or Konoha, with a few from other places here and there. I blame the RP they all got created in since Kiri people just kind of came in and then went inactive, never spurred me to make people there. *shrug*
But yeah, I recognize that picture... Its a splicing of two pictures by osy057 no?
Indeed. I can't do the colors now because I am on my iPod. But later tonight I will be on my computer. What pink colors would you like removed? Also, do you have a character page I could upload this to when I am done?
Would you like me to make her some pupils? I could take one of suigetsu's eyes (the purple part), paste it on to hers, and make it green or blue? I could also start some of the stuff on her infobox too if you would like it.
Well, for starters, would you happen to know where to get an .svg kanji symbol of a shark? I want to make a shark sage but I don't the symbol for Kamishiō, the place one trains to become a shark sage. User:Ten Tailed Fox got a nice symbol for Shinkyō but he has yet to respond to my question asking where he got it.
And then some. I even tried Inkscape put the pictures I did look terrible. Also, I know something else you could help me with to, if you could. I need help with a nickname for Roka and his sword (for example, Zabuza is the demon of the Mist and his blade is nicknamed the executioner's blade). I couldn't think of any good nicknames. His sword's name is Mizusameshini, by the way.
Heh. I don't use Inkscape for actual image making, purely conversions. And I use GIMP as much as possible as the poor man's Photoshop. Online tutorials!
The only thing that came to mind was "Blue Ranger"... Lol. I would say try finding something that connects the blade to its namesake (I.E: Shark mythology) but I don't know jack all when it comes to sharks and myths.
Indeed. So quick question, do think its plausible for some in Naruto to physically become a sword?
I mean obviously people have sealed gigantic demons into other people but being chakra, you could argue that their mass is maleable. On the other hand you have Orochimaru who regurgitates swords like he swallowed spoons all day as a kid.
I think the way Orochimaru summoned his sword was a play on the whole snake theme. You could create an advance type of transformation technique that is available to members of her clan (essentially a Hiden technique). You could base it off of the transformation technique from the first naruto shippuden movie (the one with neji and lee as fill-ins for kakashi and sasugay).
It's called Shadow Mirror Body Changing Method. You could make it so that they can change into swords and float like Orochimaru's sword. You can also have the sword be different for each member of the clan.
Ooooh. Though the concept in mind is somewhat different. But since it seems to exist, I can go ahead with it and not feel like I'm doing something stupid. So, yes, before you ask Roka may be able to wield his girlfriend. Lol.
It isn't any less weird than saying "an army of ninja and samurai gear up for war against a guy pretending to be a guy pretending to be another guy and his weird friend with a snake for a belly button". xD
Your logic is flawless. LOL. I saw her page, too; it looks good so far. Also, I realized I couldn't use Taiga because he was born 39 years after the fourth shinobi world war. Roka and Nikuya would be, at least, in their fifties. :3
On another note, I find another picture on my old flash drive you may like. It's below.
Technically all my characters are born before the Fourth Shinobi War. In an alternate timeline. We need not worry about their ages, besides, Nikuya is a living pool of steel... I don't think she ages much anymore xD
True. It needs to be after the forth shinobi world war but do we want it 60 years after. What do you think. Would this work for you? (Roka would be born 39 years after and his girlfriend would be 36 years after in order to match Taiga plus the 22 years it would take for them to age).
Karin is so annoying the Chidori Sharp Spear tried to get past her as quick as possible. Of course!
Really? I was kidding!
In Nukiya's case its pretty much genetically hers all on its own, but if I ever did make a character that uses the Steel Release through normal inherited means I'd probably say Earth and Yin. Imagination + Dirt and ore = Minecraft... wait...
We could go with something along those lines. Maybe he went looking for her when everyone else was busy being dicks? Could have found Meihaku's lab, found out what happened and claim the Nikuya-Ekitaikinzoku with the intent of undoing the seal, only for Nikuya to bypass the damn thing when Meihaku inevitably finds him? (Law of Drama!)
Its more or less all in the head, just need to actually put it on the page which I haven't done as my ability to sleep properly seems to have just went down the crapper. Will have some done today at some point.
I'm not sure if I am going to do them tonight or tomorrow, but let me tell you. Basically it allows you to create blades that protrude from the users body and it also allows them to make their body razor sharp. I'll play off those basic ideas.
So, I was lookin' over some stuff and found a few things I'd like to nit pick at you, if you don't mind, its not meant to be insulting or anything just things I find a little weird.
First: Your Sharingan characters, they all have Susanoo, Amaterasu, and Tsukuyomi. Why? I mean asides from them being the most established of the Mangekyo techniques, its been pretty well noted that people often get different abilities instead, Shisui got Kotoamatsukami, Kakashi has Kamui and such. Hell my own character has two unique abilities in Koshinto and Sarutahiko. It'd be nice to see something unique is all I'm saying (*cough*AnditmightlessenthehugeOPspameveryonedoeswithsharingan*cough*).
Second: Chidori does not require that people have Sharingan. It never has, Kakashi Gaiden made it pretty clear that Kakashi had already created the technique before obtaining the Sharingan, he was just forbidden from using it as the drawbacks weren't worth it. This doesn't stop people from learning the technique, nor would it stop them from using it. All it would do is give them a very lethal drawback if they don't use it in the right conditions (I.E: When their opponent can't move).
Third: I'm not on your friend section of your profile! For shame!
First: Yeah I know. I can't really seem to find the time to make any original ones though. I made Katsumi for Taiga, but that's about it. I lie Susanoo but the other two I wouldn't mind getting rid of. :P
Second: That's all true, but the "only use if you have Sharingan" rule has been established for years, even before I joined the wiki as prodigy. I wanted to give it to one of my first characters, but I was denied because he did not possess the Sharingan.
Ninigi (ニニギ, Ninigi) is a Mangekyō technique capable of altering, erasing, or fabricating memories within a target. Each of these three abilities are applied differently, with the ability to create memories inherint in the user's "left Mangekyō" while the ability to erase resides within the "right Mangekyō". To activate either of these abilities the user must hide the eye that is not to be used (Hiding the right eye if your creating a memory and vice versa). As such the ability to alter memories instead of erasing or creating them is only achieved when both eyes are focused on the target.
Ninigi in this case btw, is Ninigi-no-Mikoto, the grandson of Amaterasu who was sent to pacify Japan with the three Imperial Regalia (Kusanagi, etc.). He is also the great-grandfather of the first emperor.
Yeah, I'd say that's blatant canon breaking, Susanoo never showed up in any case until after the other two, but that's just me and the point I was making is that the eyes can have separate powers so someone could have Amaterasu and Ninigi, or Koshinto and Sakurahito. :D
Well I suppose but you can swap in moves too. Instead of Amaterasu and Tsukuyomi for Susanoo, you could swap out one for a custom one. Also, Kishimoto broke his own canon rule with Kakashi getting Mangekyō. Canon breaking within canon?!
Considering Kamui and Tobi's Mangekyo are connected, I'm gonna go with the idea that either A) Tobi took Obito's eye and did the Mangekyo process which gave it to Kakashi having Obito's other eye, or B) Tobi is Obito so the logic in the series died before it even started.
But, meh. I'm not much of a fan of Amaterasu (It doesn't do any of the things it should do and as such utterly fails at being the "ultimate fire release technique") or Susanoo (Because the Uchiha's needed something else to be completely OP).
I had no idea you had replied on the RP, so I fixed that and you are good to go. Also I had two questions for you concerning Nikuya...
One: Since both her and Roka live at the swordsman mansion, do they share a room and, of so, do they share I bed. (I'm leaning toward yes, but I'm just a perv so I'll leave that to you). I left the response on the RP ambiguous so that you can respond accordingly.
Two: Is Nikuya a good cook? That is , if she even likes to cook. Also, if she is not a good cook, I'm going to have Roka love whatever she makes do even if she isn't good and it looks and taste like charcoal, I'll still have him eat it.
Oh, almost forgot. I reset the story line to where we originally had it (fifteen years after the war plus Roka's age, 22. This makes it take place 37 years after the war). I'm going to ignore the time difference like you suggested before.