Hey, I like this character a lot, it's a good piece of writing.
But, I do find some small things here and there in the page itself:
"Rokubi Okibiuka was born into the Okibiuka as the son of the great Museidenkou Okibiuka"
I found this to be a little un-wiki-ish, as it sounds biased. If it's not for the sake of bias, then I would suggest capitalize the "great" before Museidenkou. This would turn it into a title, and not a modifier for the character mentioned.
PipeCleaner345 14:34, March 30, 2010 (UTC)